In my essay 2, I would like to write about robots that are used in medical fields in Japan, especially in nursing care service. At first I was against robots because, as I read the required readings in ELP Reader and the book "Radical Revolution", I somehow had negative images for them and I was even scared when I think of an idea that someday humans might lose control and robots take over our world. Though it is so obvious that Japan will be lack in workforce in the near future while the number of elderly people will keep going up. Even today, there is an urgent need for people who can take care of the aged. Then I came to think that medical-care robots is the key to solve this problem and improve the situation.
Therefore my thesis statement for essay 2 is that the invention of nursing-care robots should be accelerated and they should be put in practical use as soon as possible in order to cover the lack of workforce which is well expected to happen in the near future, lighten the workload of care workers and give safer and more accurate treatment to patients.
Nice work! This is a well-formed thesis, including a clear claim and three well-articulated supporting points. Well done!
返信削除Your thesis statement is quite easy to understand what you are going to write about in your essay :)
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